i like your video very much, i am getting a capture card for x-mas so i wll be working on a project similar, the only things i think you need to work on are:
-filming techniques
-angles
-movement
-smooth filming
-more artsy shots
other then that i really liked it.
A good example on what i am looking for is
i look forward to part 2, and i hope you take my critisism to an advantage
maybe me and you can make a video soon.