GoW Fan Fiction

[The Akwarrior]

if u dont know what a fan fic is, its basicly a story based on an origanal story made by a fan of that story (LOL), anyways today while we were in a stay put drill (if u know what that meens) i had a sudden urge to write.........so i started writing, i've only gotten to a full page, but from what people have said about it it seems like something i could work on.......please tell me what u think


Rain....endless rain around a deserted mansion. A mansion once filled with many, it held history from years before.....so many years. But.....it was never meant to last long....not after it happend.....and yet the rain keeps falling....

The ground shakes in the cold air....suddenly the faint sound of heavy boots clashes against the pitter-patter of rain hitting the ground....the endless rain. A menacing growl is heard, challenging the oncoming foe. A voice breaks through the unending rain, "Locust!".

An explosion rings through the air. A puff of smoke risses through the rain....a moment of silence.......a voice muffled by the rain is heard, "Smoke out!". A small device clanks on the ground as it rolls to the center of a once beutiful garden. The device exhales a plume of smoke,and the surrounding area dissapears...."Get ready! Here they come!"

and thats all, plz tell me what u think!

[$ha]

Wow thats really good with enough time it could turn into a reallly good story keep at it i wanna read the whole thing

[Verity Farseer]

you like ...'s dont you. it was pretty good, keep going AK as long as you have fun doing it.

[The Akwarrior]

bump

thx, ill be writing more this weekend